Your writing style is so gorgeous. There's something that's just so smooth about it, that uses the emotions as a backdrop and transitions between them seamlessly, instead of forcing them out there. It suits these two really well, which is natural for Kyoko with how inward she keeps her strength and feelings, but works especially with Haru, which caught me a bit off guard. I usually see Haru be the one more comfortable with a gun and Kyoko better with hand-to-hand, so it's interesting that you flipped them, and somehow I think it works just as well, if not better--but then, it could just be the way you've pulled it off here.

There is a detail that bothered me, although it was in the other one you wrote. There was a line about how Kyoko aspired to be anything she wasn't, only better worded, but in any case it doesn't quite jive with my interpretation of her. I've always imagined that she's quite comfortable with the idea of being herself, with whatever comes with it.