It works very well, I think. Writing them separately works out better than trying to write them in order, sometimes.

Kyoko seems hard to write for everyone. She's only had a brief cameo in one thing I've written, and I kept revising what little she did in it over and over and never was quite happy with it. (Oddly, when I was writing genderbent Ryoko-centric drabbles, as a boy he came much easier, but even then I wasn't really sure.) It might just be because she's not a forward enough character to convey all of herself in what screentime she has.

I think you typoed again, but since you told me a "not" should be there, I can piece it together myself. No problem |D